Make It Hurt by Jackie Ashenden
I was drawn in by the creative photography on the front cover as well as the title. What was this about? Was there going to be rough stuff? Or was it a romance that tore at your heart strings? To say I was intrigued, well, pretty much sums it up. What a great name for a book. Make It Hurt. So many possibilities! Maybe it was about a guy who has an accident or was it about an illness?
Read on, I told myself!! I opened the book. First word. “Fuck”. Now that could go either way for me. It could mean, this is going to be a high anxiety, high action motherfucker of a book that is going to fast pace me into a jet stream of excitement? Or was it something more? Something less? When I realized our main character has blurted it out, I forgave her immediately for such a tough word so early on. To me, tough chicks are okay, to a point. I am a modern girl, I love some colorful wording and this looked like an erotic title, so sally forth into the chapter.. After hearing it continuously throughout , I began to wonder. And I found an amazing tool … Kindle has a search bar. I searched for the word ‘Fuck’..and then because I was fascinated.. I continued on..
Did you know.. This book contains the word ‘Fuck’ 237 times? Wow! said I. I was intrigued! So here is the list of other over used words in this book..
There are …
In all that, I was surprised to find there was 0 ‘Cunts’. You would think there would be at least one!
0 ‘Twats’ no surprise there.. who uses that word anymore? Twat.. just not a good word.
10 Balls (at least it is an even number, but it does not add up with the dicks and the pricks. Something is missing.)
0 ‘Cums’ (Now that is disappointing, Although… )
7 Orgasms..(Thank goodness!)
75 times someone said “God damn”
Only 10 ‘Bikers’
1 ‘Hooker’ cause that is just not used anymore, I guess.
0 Sluts. (I doubt that is a true statement.)
17 times someone said ‘Piss’ or ‘Pissed’
and 27 ‘Christ’s’
Even for a tough biker gang, that is a lot of swearing. Especially since I think most of these words are used by our main characters. Not that I am against prolific language,(prolific means fruitful, and instead of colorful being used again, I used that word. It might not be right, but dang it, it sounds right and I am that kind of writer.) but I felt it was way over done. No one talks like that except for maybe a fourteen year old boy with a really bad Tourette’s problem.
Of course, this is only my opinion, and last time I checked, that meant pretty much nothing. I do know quite a few bikers, and I have never seen them cuss in such massive quantities. They use many, many other words. But again…. see above.
Here is the thing, It was unbelievable. From bounty hunting rules and regs, to the way bikers in general were represented. (I know it is a bad biker gang). From the portrayal of Texas, to the way Nora Sutcliff acted. Not one Y’all in the entire book! No mention of sports, No football? Blasphemy! It is Texas after all!
I just felt it was a mishmash of things un-researched, down to the cowboy hat she wore. I mean… Unless you are working on a ranch, or you are going out for the night, you are not going to wear a cowboy hat. She was no Raylan, and this was not Kentucky.
Now, the first erotic scene, it was great. Beautifully done. Totally awesome. Loved it. Right after … That was difficult. Suddenly our Hero , Smith … (?) Takes on a completely uncool attitude and becomes a sullen little whiny boy. As he goes from man to Muppet baby… I literally took on the voice as he demands she spends another night with him. He turned from handsome army man, who had a few annoying quirks, to a baby. I wanted to smack him. She, Nora, was no better. Suddenly these characters who were tough as nails only minutes before, were suddenly turned into a (not hot) school marm and Kermit the frog.. ‘Say the P Word’, Really? Ugh!
So after that, it went pretty much downhill, as I used the Muppet voices when things like demands on each other came up. The fact that it was never addressed that he turned into an over the top jealous lover bothered me. These things in real life, can turn ugly… Wait… yeah.. its a book.. Settle down….
So anyway, I think at the end Nora folded like a tortilla and gave into all his wants and desires.. unlike the strong (too strong) character she started out to be, and he didn’t have too sacrifice much, cause bro’s before ho’s and all that and his MC was all so important.. and,I kinda gave up after Kermit and Miss Piggy went at it a few more times. …
Three stars for flow and erotic first scene.
*I was given a copy of this book for an honest (sorry!) review. Thank you!